Thanks for sharing that. A friend of mine, John Prophet, author...teaches critique groups in Cape Cod. He sent me this critique outline to use whenever I am critiquing for other people. I use it quite often and have gotten several comments on it.

Critique Outline

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Title: Was it appropriate for story? Did it make you want to read the story?

Beginning: Did the opening sentence make you interested? Did it grab you?

Middle: Did the middle flow easily? Was it important to get you from the beginning to
the end of the story?

End: How did you feel at the end? Did you develop a relationship with the characters?

Plot: Was the plot believable and consistent with what the character wanted to
accomplish?

POV: 1st? 3rd? did it work for the story?

Dialogue: Was it well done? Was it easy to follow? Was it age appropriate?

Setting: Was the transition from one place to another in the story easy to follow?
Confusing?

Comments: Tell Author anything that you exceptionally liked: title, characters, descriptions, voice. List any suggestions you have that would help the story along.

Marketing Ideas: If asked or you think of a marketing area, suggest it.